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    So after hearing the news today of me failing Geometry for the year I got kind of pissed and instead of punching something i decided to write this. It took my about 30 mins, not my best but not my worst. Feedback is appreciated


    Dieing and Starting Over

    I'm Currently full of depression; but if you see me i show no expression
    Come at me and ill show you aggression; But now I'm aiming towards succession
    In the future people will do an impression; of me, but leme tell yall a confession
    I hide away all feelings like decompression; But ill get it back like repossession

    I'm sinking my self in a pond of words; Hearing sounds from hummingbirds
    They're coming in a bundle of herds; wait there a sound i hear is it firebirds
    All i see left is birds left in thirds; Violence struck here like thunderbirds
    Left inside the group known as nerds; But all that's left in my hand is crosswords

    5 letter synonym for the word dead; Picturing my face being red
    But all that i can see in my head; its a round bullet made of lead
    But all over the wall blood was spread; My face being left in a shred
    But i cant even be saved by a med; and all that's left is me on my bed

    Now i head towards the creators of this place; heading to a new life so fast its like a race
    And I'm leaving behind not even a single trace; Its so beautiful up here so much space
    Gates with the words written in black "grace"; And I can now look in the mirror with a new face
    But yet I'm full of joy i walk in with a boldface; because now its time to start at my workplace

    Make my life better than it has ever been; so now that I'm here i can begin
    and ill walk to work with a simple grin; now able to heal myself from within;
    and now ill have no more red on my skin; I'll now be able to be safe like Berlin
    And be ask soothing as a violin; My life is now more perfect than a mandolin
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    I like this its catchy
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    read this to the girl
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    Fuck off simon sarcasm is not appreciated

    @impact thanks brah means a lot

    @rkid thanks man
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    Quote Originally Posted by Andrew View Post
    Fuck off simon sarcasm is not appreciated
    the fuck?

    I mean it's a bad idea but I was just trying to say it was nice
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    don't like it still, sorry. it seems as if your lines go in two parts, question & answer, which a lot of rappers do, it's very common, but it seems as if your answer has nothing to do with the question. you need to work on that haha

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    Kill yourself; let's see if you start over.
    I hide away all feelings like decompression
    You hide your feelings by expanding them..?
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    you can vote for palin like everyone else cuz thats why i initiate plato
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mister Maggot View Post
    Kill yourself; let's see if you start over.


    You hide your feelings by expanding them..?
    Thanks i didnt notice that lol...
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    Pretty deep stuff this bro!
    Good job.
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