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    Hi there!

    So, I've to write an essay for French about a certain situation in Holland. As you know, Holland has kind of "legalized" specific drugs, as truffles, weed, hasj.
    Drugs like XTC, however are forbidden. If you have more than 2 pills in your pocket, you will get a criminel record. I've to write why I'm against or pro this law.
    I'm against it.

    Well , my question is: Is my French correct? It shouldn't be perfect, or beautiful, but just correct. Are there any real mistakes? Yes? What are the mistakes?

    J'entends souvent critiquer l'usage de drogues dures autour de moi. Beaucoup de gens avalent XTC pendant leur études. C'est une chose délicate. D'une part, c'est à l'encontre de loi, mais d'autre part, il y a une punition exorbitante. Si on prend toi en défaut, tu as un casier judiciaire pour plusieurs années.

    Je crois que cette punition n'est pas juste. Une amende est correcte. Certes, les drogués doivent être affiché, mais la punition ne doit pas concerner pour plusieurs années. Beaucoup de gens ont sans travail par le casier judiciaire.

    Le gouvernement doit afficher les dealers, au lieu de droguès. "Mais si ne personne se drogue, il y n'a pas des dealers!" on dira. Naturellement, mais les droguès existeront à jamais! Mais si le gouvernement affiche les dealers, d'autres dealers dissuaderont.

    Brièvement, le gouvernement doit changer la punition.

    Vive la liberté!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Huey View Post
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    You mean that ive to check it with google translater?!
    I hope that was a joke. Google translate is bad as fuck.
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    So the first paragraph has tons of mistakes.
    "on one hand, it's against the law. On the other hand, there's a big punishment. " How I would write it would be " non seulement les que c'est contre la loi, mais on peut aussi souffrir des conséquences judiciaires exorbitants. Si on en prend seulement un, on peut avoir un cas judiciaire pour plusieurs années." the second one also has errors. How I'd write it would be "je crois que cette punition n'est pas juste. Une petite amende est correcte, ainsi que les drogues retirés de la possession, mains la punition ne devrait pas durer pendant des plusieurs années. À cause de cela, plusieurs personnes sont sans travail." finally, last paragraph would be more like "Le gouvernement devrait plus tôt punir les dealers, mais non les drogués. "Mais si personne ne drogue, on n'aura pas de drogués." Oui, mais les drogues seront là pour toujours! Si le gouvernement punit les dealers, ils dissoudront naturellement, effectivement éliminant l'accessibilité de la drogue." My French isn't perfect, but good luck on your project. Last two sentences are fine.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Ethernet View Post
    So the first paragraph has tons of mistakes.
    "on one hand, it's against the law. On the other hand, there's a big punishment. " How I would write it would be " non seulement les que c'est contre la loi, mais on peut aussi souffrir des conséquences judiciaires exorbitants. Si on en prend seulement un, on peut avoir un cas judiciaire pour plusieurs années." the second one also has errors. How I'd write it would be "je crois que cette punition n'est pas juste. Une petite amende est correcte, ainsi que les drogues retirés de la possession, mains la punition ne devrait pas durer pendant des plusieurs années. À cause de cela, plusieurs personnes sont sans travail." finally, last paragraph would be more like "Le gouvernement devrait plus tôt punir les dealers, mais non les drogués. "Mais si personne ne drogue, on n'aura pas de drogués." Oui, mais les drogues seront là pour toujours! Si le gouvernement punit les dealers, ils dissoudront naturellement, effectivement éliminant l'accessibilité de la drogue." My French isn't perfect, but good luck on your project. Last two sentences are fine.
    Thanks dude!

    Were the lines that you've corrected, totally wrong, or could it just be better?
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    Quote Originally Posted by theman123 View Post
    Thanks dude!

    Were the lines that you've corrected, totally wrong, or could it just be better?
    some were totally wrong haha
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