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    Can someone read this paragraph and tell me if i need to fix somethings?


    Its a Literary Analysis Essay


    The Devil’s influence was strong. Later in the story as Goodman Brown gets closer to the ceremony he hears a voice that shocked him, it was his Faith. “ “Faith!” shouted Goodman Brown, in a voice of agony and desperation;” (Hawthorne (page number)). Goodman Brown screams Faiths name because he felt hurt by the fact that she would attend the ceremony. To find out that even your last hope of good can be influenced by evil is something scary. After recognizing the voice of his beloved wife Goodman Brown feels hurt and depressed. Faith being at the ceremony is ironic because she was his last bit of faith in humanity. “My Faith is gone!” (Hawthorne (Page NUmber) ).



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    Only thing I found was "
    Faith, being at the ceremony is ironic because she was his last bit of .."
    Comma after Faith

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    Is this the crucible ? use better transitions otherwise looks fine the first sentence the devils influence was strong I would also change can't really write it for u ATM because I am typing from my phone lol but gl
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    This is pretty small, is there more? I might be taking it out of context, because this makes no sense.
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    "My faith is gone."

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